Yes, exactly what KA Tan said! And also, when the same lines appear across both poems, in roughly the same placement, the congruence is really lovely. There's also an orderliness to the repetition, kind of like a (musical) fugue. In fact, the L and R in the Twine file made me think of hands playing a piano. Really beautiful!
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this is so so beautiful. the poem is so moving in every iteration which is a real accomplishment!
Yes, exactly what KA Tan said! And also, when the same lines appear across both poems, in roughly the same placement, the congruence is really lovely. There's also an orderliness to the repetition, kind of like a (musical) fugue. In fact, the L and R in the Twine file made me think of hands playing a piano. Really beautiful!
This was incredible! I loved the poems somehow never quite touching, the longing conveyed through shape and form as well as in text.
JINX YOU'VE DONE IT AGAIN!!!!!!!!! AHHHH THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL<3333333
This is beautiful. I love the odd mechanics of changing words and structure! It’s a lovely piece.